Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
It
is often argues
that Change the verb form
is often argued
younger
generation should spend their leisure Correct article usage
the younger
time
for
non-profitable community services which is beneficial for their future Change preposition
on
as well as
for the
society. Correct article usage
apply
According to
my point of Change preposition
In
view
I believe engaging without earning something can Add a comma
view,
leads
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lead
once
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to
life
for meaningful and it is Correct article usage
a life
better
option for gaining some experience for future related Add an article
a better
the better
work
.
Firstly
, nowadays every nation facing
violence and other Wrong verb form
faces
crime
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crimes
due to
not having proper disciplines
from the beginning. Fix the agreement mistake
discipline
Therefore
, engaging adolescents for
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in
non-profitable
works like dog Correct your spelling
non-profit
shelter
, elder homes, Fix the agreement mistake
shelters
charity
Correct word choice
and charity
works
can make them caring and Fix the agreement mistake
work
well
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apply
discipline
persons. And they can learn how to interact with people and how to make society better for Correct your spelling
disciplined
future
.
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the future
Secondly
, if the new generation involve
with more Wrong verb form
is involved
charity related
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charity-related
work
it will help to reduced
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reduce
the
Correct article usage
apply
time
waste
and they can Replace the word
wasted
used
their Change the verb form
use
time
for something valuable to increase their knowledge. As
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For
example
if they Add a comma
example,
work
in the library as volunteer, they can extract huge knowledge from that. Also
, it helps to low down
the rate of bullying and drug usage because if, Wrong verb form
lower
the
teenagers manage their Correct article usage
apply
time
accurate
they do not possess any Change the word
accurately
time
for
conduct any Change preposition
to
violence related
habits.
In conclusion, adolescents Add a hyphen
violence-related
engage
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engaging
non paid
community service Add a hyphen
non-paid
work
from the beginning can lead the society for better. Cause
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Because of
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management, work related
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work-related
experienced
can Replace the word
experience
gain
from that . Wrong verb form
be gained
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, it will help to reduce the
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also
drug usage of
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