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Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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After high school and before university, some
students
 are interested in taking a
gap
year
 to travel or to work. From my perspective, having a chance to learn new skills and earn life experiences through a
year
 of no studying outweighs the disadvantage which is losing the motivation to pursue education. On the one hand, a
gap
year
 provides
students
 with a wonderful opportunity to learn new things outside of their comfort zone. By exploring more diverse cultures when
traveling
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 or working,
students
 can enrich themselves with
knowledge
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 they didn’t know previously and expand their social circle.
Moreover
, a
year
 of freedom helps them consider what they want to do next and be better prepared for the future.
For example
, not only can a graduated high schooler who works a job abroad gain work experience, but the student can
also
 acquire a better outlook on life.
On the other hand
, many
students
 often get used to working or
traveling
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 and refuse to return to a life of study after a
year
 off. They either become lazy or think tertiary education isn’t worth the effort, so they go straight into jobs that are beneath their capabilities without thinking about the long-term prospects.
For instance
, a survey by the British Government found
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% of
students
 who take a
gap
year
 never enter tertiary education. All in all,
gap
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year
 has its merits and demerits. In my opinion, as long as
students
 have firm determination and a passion for studying, the benefits of
gap
year
 will always outshine the drawbacks.
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task response
Make sure to fully address all parts of the essay prompt and provide a clear opinion.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to enhance the flow and coherence of your ideas.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors and improve clarity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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