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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that in the modern world, the most of research
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people
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,and many
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governments
 are spending a lot of money
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develop
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in
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humans
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 live. I surely agree
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researcher
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 should be focusing
to help
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people
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This
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this
 situation and will give reasons from my point of view.
To begin
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developer should
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in
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 a good living
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people
. First of all, humans
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 very important.
For example
, many
countries
 always believe that if
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 have
best
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 living like food, housing and education, their
countries
 will
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. So, governments should
to
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support funding to scientists.
Secondly
, the survey found that in many
countries
 which developed, they always think
in
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people
 first because they believe that humans are
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 in their country. Another point of view, some group of
people
 think that
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 should
to
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survey
in
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other
flied
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such
 as technology and
environment
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 ,but I think that if
scientist
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think
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 about
technolgy
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technology
 and
environment
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, it will
be improving
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improve
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population
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 too.
To sum up
, I think that it is true that the most important aim of science should be to improve
people
's
live
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 because if
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the population
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 have
best
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the best
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 living like food, housing and education, their
countries
 will
development
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develop
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.
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