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You want to sell your bicycle. You think a friend of yours might be interested in buying it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you want to sell the bicycle Describe the bicycle Suggest a day/time when your friend can view it

#bicycle #friend #time
Dear Susan, Hope you are enjoying your music class.
Although
 we have
meet
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 each other
such
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 a short time,
it's
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feel
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 much longer. On my
last
 birthday, my dad gifted me a new
bicycle
. As you know, I am going to participate in the inter-college cycling race
in
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next month. For that, I have to buy some special
cloth
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, so I decided to sell my old
bicycle
.
While
 I
am
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 discussing with our friends, Joyce told me that you might be interested
to buy
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in buying
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.
This
 is a Hero brand
bicycle
,
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 and used only for two years .
Furthermore
, I added some accessories for optimal
performace
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performance
. It's a
red coloured
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, three geared, sleek design
bicycle
. I have been doing periodic maintenance at the ABC cycles in the town. If you are interested, let me know. we can meet at the
Mc Donald
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 in
the
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down town
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 on Friday at 5pm. I will bring the cycle, so you can view it. Warm regards, Jennifer
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Check for any errors in punctuation and capitalization in the greeting and closing sections.
lexcial resource
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grammatical range
Review and correct any grammatical errors in the letter.
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