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The table below shows social and economic indictators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations Statistics.

The table below shows social and economic indictators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations Statistics.
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In reference
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 to United
Nations
 Statistics, the table illustrates the part of society and economics in
four
 different
nations
 (
Canada
,
Japan
, Peru, and
Zaire
) in the year 1994.
Overall
,
Zaire
 had the lowest figure compared to the remaining
nations
 with
four
 indicators. And It could be seen
the
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 development of
Canada
 and
Japan
.
Canada
 and
Japan
 accounted
to
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for
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 the highest parts in
four
 aspects.
Japan
 had the figures about average income,
life
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and life
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 expectancy which was higher than
Canada
.
In addition
,
Japan
 was
the
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lower than
Canada
 in the sector of daily calorie supply at
round
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around
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 300 per person
while
 in adult literacy rate was the same percentage between
Canada
 and
Japan
.
Another
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Other
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 countries
was
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 Peru and
Zaire
 which accounted for
a
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lower figures than the remaining
nations
. Peru was higher than
Zaire
about
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by about
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four
 indicators.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nations, four, canada, japan, zaire with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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