Currently, majority of people are willing to travel around the world to visit the sight seeying places because it is much more easier now as apposed to past. There are several benefits of tourism and there are outweigh the drawbacks.
Tourism is very important in many countries ,and tourism is the main income of their countries. At present, many
people
prefer to visit Use synonyms
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amazing place. So, some think that Linking Words
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action will be valuable ,but some believe that Linking Words
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situation may be harmful to places. Linking Words
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essay will discuss both views and will give reasons.
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To begin
with, the benefit of travelling, many Linking Words
people
think that travelling will bring more money to them and their countries. Use synonyms
In addition
, they believe that if many travellers visit their cities, businesses will like hotels and shops ,and many local Linking Words
people
will have a job too. Use synonyms
For example
, the survey found that the percentage of jobs in Scenery Town have been increasing ,and the salary Linking Words
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higher than in other towns. I think that travelling is very useful in many nations because many places always have many benefits Change the verb form
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them.
Another point of view, some have said that tourists will destroy nature Change preposition
for
such
as many companies cutting trees to build hotels or transportation. Linking Words
Secondly
, many tourist towns will have problems with population. Linking Words
For instance
, many towns have bad populations and traffic jams because many Linking Words
people
just thinking about business so, they may destroy the beautiful nature and Use synonyms
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good weather.
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To sum up
, I think that the tourism business will bring more benefits for us like occupation, money and development. Linking Words
In contrast
, Linking Words
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business may be dangerous too ,if we do not know how to solve Linking Words
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problem, the environment will be loosened by humans.Linking Words
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task response
Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed and a clear position is taken regarding the benefits and drawbacks of tourism.
coherence cohesion
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Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and varied language to convey your ideas.
grammatical range
Work on your sentence structure to include a wider range of sentence types and more complex sentence structures.