Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem?

It is highly improbable that, in the modern era, a person who does not hear about global warming is found.
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, many modern scientists have claimed that we cannot survive if do not give sufficient attention to it,
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on the contrary
many argue that it is only science fiction. In
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essay I am going to explain
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what causes
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problem giving some possible solutions. First and foremost, it is widely agreed that burning fossil fuels, deforestation and overpopulation are the most common reasons for global warming. Undoubtedly, a huge amount of carbon dioxide is released by using
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different types of engines.
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, modern science
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that by 2050 humanity would be on the verge of extinction
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of
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average
temperature by two degrees Celcius.
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many parts of the globe would be inhabitable because of the desert which will occur. Unfortunately, cutting
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forest and gigantic population density will
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the same effects. To be more precise, after deforestation soil is
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unsustainable
for agriculture
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overpopulated places
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would be the same. Having said that, it is not necessary to reinvent the wheel, because many solutions have already been invented.
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, alternative sources of energy, like hydrogen engines, which release only water without fumes, heavy metals etc. It is only needed to invest enough in science. Undeniably,
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have to admit very strict policies
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deforestation as long as forest it is "the lungs of our planet". What is more, populational growth should be controlled by providing information about
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birthing
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third world countries contraception should be on
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free basis. In conclusion, during
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few
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we can see climate changes
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tsunamis
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. As it may be seen, in today's world it may bring only
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effects on society, but in the long
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it is only our choice would consequences
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or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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