The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some travel agencies make an offer for customers to get
trip
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with low-cost tickets. Travelling
out side
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outside
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country is an important
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for
people
to increase their culture during contact with others.
However
, there are some
people
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who think
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it is negative to let
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go
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outside
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meanwhile others have
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this
idea. In the
first,
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of cheapest price of tickets dramatically will
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raise travelers. It will
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affect
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people
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knowledge when they leave their
place
to
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different
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a different
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one. They may learn
variety
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a variety
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of languages and see an
intersting
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interesting
place
that they have
ever
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never seen
them
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before.
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Furthermore
, they could be more
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resilient
instead
of staying in
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location with
same
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community.
In addition
, airlines would like to
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up their
penifits
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benefits
profits
by selling more tickets.
On the other hand
, why
some
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citizens feel that if
people
travel around the world, they will have disadvantages
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They think if you live in
same
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place
, you will be safer.
In contrast
, when you leave your own
place
you will exposed to
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or
dificultie
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difficulties
difficult
for instance
when you contact with foreign
people
who
talk
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speak
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a diffrent
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diffrent languge
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different language
everyone will feel anxiety
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about explaining
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thier
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their
needs.
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Moreover
, taking
trip
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a trip
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inside
country
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the country
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is better than
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out side
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outside
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.
In addition
, everybody might keep
thier
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their
money
instead
of
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them. There are some places
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that deserve
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to
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not at
all
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. Offering airline agencies
are
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an amazing chance for humanity to relax on their vacation. Actually, any
trip
may
has
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both sides of advantages
or
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and
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disadvantages but it depend on where you travel and if the agency
offer
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offers
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low
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a low
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price
of
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trip
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the trip
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that
is
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a mean
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mean
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good
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a good
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chance for
all
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everyone
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to meet different culture even if there is any
difficults
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difficulty
difficulties
.
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task achievement
Your essay does not fully address the prompt. While you mention both the positive and negative aspects of low-cost airlines, you need to provide a clear discussion of each side and give your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a somewhat logical structure, but there is room for improvement. Consider organizing your ideas more effectively and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is generally appropriate, but there are some errors and instances where more precise or varied vocabulary could be used. Aim to expand your range of vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
grammatical range
Your grammatical range is limited, and there are several errors throughout the essay. Work on improving your grammar skills to enhance the clarity and accuracy of your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Affordability
  • Global mobility
  • Convenience
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural exchange
  • Enhanced connectivity
  • Drawbacks
  • Sustainable travel
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