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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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With the advent of technology, communication has been easier than ever. More and more individuals are connecting to others via online and
sms
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platforms
,
as a
result
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 the old trend of conversating in
person
 will soon vanish
off
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. I
whole heartedly
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 concur with the above-mentioned notion,
increased
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 availability of people over the web
platforms
,
as well as
promotion
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the promotion
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 of virtual relationships will prove
this
.
To begin
 with, nowadays people are more available on their mobile chatting
platforms
 than in real life.
Additionally
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 the busy working environment has promoted
this
 to a
further
 extent.
For instance
,
according to
 a recent survey more than 80 per cent of
the
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individuals connect with their
freinds
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friends
 and family over texting applications and
vedio
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video
 calls making physical
meeting
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 an old thing.
Furthermore
, the concept of meeting and making relations over the web is on an incredible rise, promoting the concept of virtual relationships
further
 on. Not only it
helps
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help
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 them to connect to
person
 who is continents apart but
also
 helps in
making
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make
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 deeper connections with them.
For example
,
cross country
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 relationships have experienced a
three fold
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threefold
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 rise after
introduction
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the introduction
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 of modern communication methods.
Hence
, the trend of meeting in
person
 is starting to
loose
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 its shade.
To conclude
,
eventhough
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even though
conversating
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 in
person
 holds utmost importance when it comes to meeting new people,
hassle free
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hassle-free
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 connection over texts and increasing usage of online
platforms
 have completely changed today's scenario. It's the
person
's responsibility to
cross check
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cross-check
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 the
person
 they are communicating with before delving into the matter.
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