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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culturethey should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often thought that
travelers
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 should adapt to the customs and culture of their destination country. I agree
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this
 statement but only to a certain extent as I believe that moderation is often key in these situations. On the one hand, when we travel, getting to know the culture and the local practices is often one of the main goals,
hence
 to be actively part of them can be an engaging way to live the experience. It is
also
 compulsory to remember that we are the guests in the country we visit and
for
this
 reason, adapting to some
formalites
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formalities
formality
 and traditions often boils down to a matter of respect towards the locals.
On the other hand
, especially when visiting territories profoundly different compared to the
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 we are so accustomed to, we can come into contact with traditions that clash with our own. In
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 situations, it is often up to us to find a balance to stay respectful yet still true to our identity.
Moreover
, if
this
 adaptive behaviour goes too far it could be seen as
disrespectul
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disrespectful
 or considered to be cultural appropriation. In conclusion, trying to merge with the people and the environment we are visiting can often be the approach that
teach
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 us the most about the host country.
However
, it is not always possible and taking it too far could be interpreted the wrong way.
Overall
, I strongly
advice
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travelers
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travellers
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 to adopt
this
 method but I
also
 suggest
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 so with care and moderation.
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