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More and more people are shifting to cities from country side. Does this have advantages or disadvantage on environment?

#people #cities #country #side #environment
Nowadays, the number of
people
prefer
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who prefer
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 to move to live in the country increased for many different
reaseons
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reasons
. In
this
essay
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essay,
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 I will write about
this
supject
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subject
 and the
penfits
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benefits
 and
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of
this
stuation
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situation
.
In
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On
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one
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the one
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 hand,
this
 have a lot of advantages
for instance
,
citys
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cities
had
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have
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 more chance
for
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apply
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how
looking
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look
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 for
best
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the best
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 career life and more
opportinty
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opportunities
 to have
best
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the best
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eduction
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education
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 for families and children. Much more
facilites
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facilities
 but it will
,
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apply
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cost more than living in
village
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the village
a village
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. On the flip side, it will be the main
reaseon
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reason
 for air pollution so that lift
bad
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a bad
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 impact on
environment
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the environment
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, crowded streets,
strees
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trees
stress
streets
 and
deepration
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desperation
decoration
 for most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
due to
 daily life in
big
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the big
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 country
more
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being more
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streesful
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stressful
 and fast.
While
,
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apply
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liveing
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living
in
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on
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 led the
people
 to be calm and more caring about
nuture
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nature
,
however
, they will go for
farming
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a farming
the farming
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job
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jobs
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 and take care
for
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of
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 each other. In
conclution
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conclusion
, day by day
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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families
chooseing
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choosing
 to move to the towns
grow
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is growing
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, so for sure that will
lift
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have
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bad
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a bad
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 impact on the
enviroment
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environment
 as mentioned before. The
climit
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climate
limit
 and weather will be unhealthy because how
people
 will
useing
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use
them
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their
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car
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cars
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 more often to move from one place to another and the
other
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others
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 do not care about
cleanless
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cleanliness
 put
them
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their
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 trash everywhere. Everyone should
to
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apply
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learn how to care and keep our circumstances in the best way.
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