Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

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modern society, more parents
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for
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children
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classes after
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school and entire weekends. It is so controversial occasion
due to
the other conditions.
However
, I tend to think that it is vital for youth to learn more than at school.
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the
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future. What I mean here is that exploring new studies significantly affects
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intellectual opportunities to think quickly and suggest many meaningful ideas.
For instance
, the vast majority of China kids prefer
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whole
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themselves
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time for
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. Actually,
Chinese
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exam is complicated for
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student from
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world which
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high
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level of intelligence.
As a result
, they take an examination on which life depends and deserves high scores in
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.
On the other hand
, it is harmful
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a child
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child
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body health
due to
the fact brain overloading leads to burnout.
Furthermore
, taking up time during weekends results leisure shortage to spend time with friends. Take
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encourages
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children to study hard and do not pay attention
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any facilities.
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obtains a couple of mental diseases that
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to cure even with experts.
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between kid and friends since friends positively
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on
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mental health.
To sum up
two opinions with the comparison, I can establish that it is still crucial to study whole your life.
However
, do not forget about other things which
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our lifestyle.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reinforce learning
  • personalized attention
  • student-to-teacher ratios
  • comprehensive coverage
  • academic and non-academic subjects
  • well-rounded development
  • address specific weaknesses
  • grade improvement
  • performance in exams
  • leisure time
  • burnout
  • educational opportunities
  • socio-economic disparity
  • over-scheduling
  • balanced approach
  • after-school programs
  • weekend tutoring
  • additional practice
  • constructive criticism
  • holistic growth
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