You are going to visit New Zealand for an "English and Homestay" program. You have just received details of your homestay host family Write your first letter to the family. In your letter: • introduce yourself • ask the family some questions to get information that is important to you • tell the family about your arrival date and time

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope

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letter finds you well. My name is Jumaniyozova Jasmina and I am excited to be joining your family as part of the English and Homestay program in New

Zealand

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.I want to continue my career and improve my English there

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,let me introduce myself: I am 14 years old and come from Uzbekistan. I am interested in learning new languages. I would like to know more about New

Zealand

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and improve my English skills.

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,I do have a few questions that I hope you can help me with, I am new to New

Zealand

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and could you please tell me more about activities or places where I can visit?

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, I would like to know about

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at your home.

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is there anything I should bring with me?

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,I will be arriving on August 15th at 16 and I am looking forward to meeting you all. Thank you very much for hosting me, and I am excited to get to know you and life in New

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! Yours faithfully, Jumaniyozova Jasmina

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coherence cohesion

Your letter could have a clearer structure with paragraphs clearly dedicated to specific points.

task achievement

Make sure to ask any additional questions to get fully prepared for your stay. For example, about food preferences or transport options.

task achievement

The letter is written in a friendly and polite tone, which is suitable for the situation.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriately used, creating a good impression.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

176 words

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