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local company is printing the paper option A : mORE NEWS OPTION B : MORE DISCOUNST

#company #paper #option #news #b #discounst
While
 I do see the benefit of coupons and discounts on the paper ,I opine that publishing more
news
 on the paper is a viable option because it has many benefits.
To begin
 with, printing more local and international
news
 will help the citizens to know what is happening in and around the Country.
Furthermore
, it
also
 alerts people to be extra cautious about their surroundings.
For instance
,
due to
 unwanted promotions in the existing
newspaperpaper
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newspaper
, it almost took us one month to know about the Russia - China War.
Additionally
 , reading more
news
 will be an advantage for children as it improves their communication skills and removes the language barrier in them.Many adults these days are unwilling to adopt the local language
due to
lack
Correct article usage
a lack
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 of resources .It is well know fact that
,
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reading the
news
 will
also
 be a good option to kill time for elderly people. Based on the aforementioned reasoning, I still stand by my Stance.
That is
, publishing advertisements is not a suited option .Again , these are my personal views,but I will support any decision taken by the local company.
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