The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.

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1888.
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, when it comes to
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2000 that number skyrocketed to 29
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. I strongly believe that other modes of transport should
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and
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to
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society and
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as
ownership
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cars
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by international law.
Firstly
, there are rapid increase
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vehicles
everyday
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, because
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make
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life easy.
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travelling system
is
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to the community.
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. And
bicycle
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bicycles
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need to
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by the government. Through
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we can reduce toxic gas
producation
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production
from
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vehicles
and can
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the
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environmental air pollution.
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example in China, they promote
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is
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main
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mode of travel.
Moreover
, every country can limit
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vehicle
ownership
for instance
only
one
automobile per family which can help to
dropdown
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the number of
vehicles
on the road. it will be
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to reduce
the
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road traffic.
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,
international
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ruling system for
vehicle
ownership
must
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to
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the
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action.
Becuase
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Because
theft
cars
can
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to another country.
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, it is better to have
one
vehicle
ownership
policy for
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world to illustrate
this
I used to
be
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import
cars
from Japan to New Zealand.
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complience
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compliance
centre can not issue
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for some
vehicle
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because it is not standard quality for New Zealand
road
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. But it
send
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by Japan. If, there is
one
policy around the world money and
tiem
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time
can be saved. In conclusion, I
stongly
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strongly
believe and agree that there must be different transport mode should
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to the community and
need
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one
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law for
ownership
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the ownership
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, import and export
vehicles
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of vehicles
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in the world. Through that we can
reduced
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the
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traffic jams, air pollution
as well as
buljary
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bulky
and
robery
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robbery
using
cars
.
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