In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the coutryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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It is

undenaible

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undeniable

that the idea of moving to cities has more benefits than staying in rural areas. Personally, I am in favour

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the first view. Research has found that people have

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traveled

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to the

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twon

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town

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searching for jobs and new life

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beenig

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being

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the countryside's

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countryside's

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, after Corona

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a huge number of jobs and businesses have been deceased and residents

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to suffer and

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, they choose to transfer to other places where they can afford essentials

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as food, clothes and

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to work.

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, downtown is usually a spot that

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facilities and utilities that

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than other places which makes life much easier.

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, rural zones are more likely when it comes to

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vacation

vacations

and journeys.

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road trips at the weekend, so they can visit the desert and farmland.

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, they had a significant experience and recharge their batteries so they can go back to work in a great mood. In conclusion, cities have shown enormous improvements over the rural areas and it is attracting more people and

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encouraging

them to move on.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the coutryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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Many young people do not spend their holidays and weekends doing outdoor activities like hiking and climbing in natural environments.

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?