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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the coutryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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It is
undenaible
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undeniable
 that the idea of moving to cities has more benefits than staying in rural areas. Personally, I am in favour
with
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 the first view. Research has found that people have
been
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traveled
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travelling
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 to the
center
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centre
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 of
twon
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town
two
 searching for jobs and new life
instead
 of
beenig
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being
at
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in
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the countryside's
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countryside's
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countrysides
countryside
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.
For example
, after Corona
pandemic
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pandemic,
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 a huge number of jobs and businesses have been deceased and residents
start
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have started
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 to suffer and
sterve
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suffer
.
As a result
, they choose to transfer to other places where they can afford essentials
such
 as food, clothes and
place
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a place
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 to work.
Furthermore
, downtown is usually a spot that
provide
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 facilities and utilities that
more
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are more
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 than other places which makes life much easier.
On the other hand
, rural zones are more likely when it comes to
vication
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vacation
vacations
 and journeys.
For instance
, In Kuwait, people are used to
have
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having
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 road trips at the weekend, so they can visit the desert and farmland.
In addition
, they had a significant experience and recharge their batteries so they can go back to work in a great mood. In conclusion, cities have shown enormous improvements over the rural areas and it is attracting more people and
encourag
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encouraging
 them to move on.
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