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Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities.

#people #neighbors #cities
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A lot of
people
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 do not know or make
friend
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friends
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with
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their
neighbours
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 in large cities. The problems need
solve
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 and
take
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taken
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 care of by humans. Nowadays, the world is more and more developed, all of the
people
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 are very busy with their job. If they have free time, they will spend
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 time on family. So, they may forget about their neighbour and do not care about that.
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 that, with the new trends,
people
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 would rather have a peaceful
life
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 than a noisy
life
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. They try to avoid making friends or chatting with
neighbours
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 because
people
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 do not want to be told a bad story by their
neighbours
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. Some families think that their
neighbours
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 are too talkative for them
t
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to
 make friends or take care.
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, if many
people
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 do not know their
neighbours
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in
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for
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 a long time when they live there,
it
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there
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 will
appear
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be
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 some
risk
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risks
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 in their
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life
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lives
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.
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, we live alone in your house. Suddenly you are sick or there is a happening in the house ( crime, fire). From that , if you make friends with
neighbours
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, they will help
us
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you
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.
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, we should have a good relationship with families living near our house, we will not be alone and uninteresting.
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, in my opinion, I think
people
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 should know their
neighbours
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 to help
partner
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partners
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 or have
assistant
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.
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, have a friendly
life
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, all of the
people
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 will love their
life
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. we should change, adapt
with
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to
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new
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the new
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 environment, more outgoing.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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