You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre. You want to find out more about the lessons. Write a letter to the manger of the sports centre. .Describe how well you can swim at the moment . Explain why you want to learn to swim better . Enquire about the time and cost of the swimming lessons

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing a letter to know about
new
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the new
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classes for swimming in your
center
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centre
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. Since I moved
in
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to
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this
town I
didn't
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haven't
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find
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found
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the
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a
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club of swimming. When your
add
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ad is
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displayed in the daily newspaper I
deceided
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decided
to contact you.
Besides
this
, the classes
are being conducting
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are being conducted
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near
to
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apply
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my home.
Although
, swimming is my favourite activity and I have experienced
for
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it for
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three years in my college. I want to join again swimming classes because I forgot the techniques and
this
is a good time to improve
skills
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my skills
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.
Furthermore
, working a whole day in
office
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the office
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I feel tired and want some
excerise
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exercise
so swimming is the best option to end my day. I request you to please send me details of the swimming course and
cost
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the cost
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of membership monthly and yearly. If you tell me all information
then
I would like to join
this
course as soon as possible. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
Provide more specific details about your current swimming skills.
task achievement
Explain in more detail why swimming is the best option to end your day.
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