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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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It is thought that recycling
waste
products
 from home is not enough, so the best approach to overcome
this
 problem is that the government will have to provide some legalisation with
regards
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 to
this
 issue. In
this
 essay,
i
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I
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 will illustrate the role of legalisation in
this
 issue and why I'm in disagreement with
this
. Currently, a lot of raw materials depend on the recycling process of the
waste
products
 so it is highly demanded like any other product.
However
, some of these items are not enough to meet the public needs.
Therefore
, what governments have to do is reinforce the public by a specific amount of these
products
 in order to meet the manufacturing needs. With
this
 strategy, the shortage of these
products
 will definitely come down.
For Example
, In my country, the amount of agricultural
products
 has not been enough for a
while
, so the government rendered a new set of regulations that
restricted
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 excessive usage of these
products
 so these items will be available in a huge amount for people with small prices.
However
, from my point of view , it's not fair to use the law in a case like that. My reason behind
that is
 the total of families who live in the same house is totally different from others. If the number of family members is high, the percentage of
waste
products
 will be proportionally high.
On the other hand
, a few family members basically lead to a handful number of
waste
products
.
Therefore
, it is not justified to legalise a specific number of recycled
products
.It would be better to consider another approach.
Also
, the economic conditions have to be considered because the
waste
products
 of poor people are smaller when compared to wealthy people. In a nutshell,
although
 legalisation in some cases played a crucial role in tackling them, it's not a good solution in a condition like that
due to
 many reasons, some of which are as I explained above.
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Task Response
Provide a more focused and direct response to the essay prompt. Your introduction sets up the discussion but does not clearly state your position on the issue of whether laws are needed to increase recycling.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical flow and organization of your essay. While your ideas are generally clear, there are some instances where the transitions between paragraphs and sentences could be smoother.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more varied and precise language throughout the essay. This will help to add depth and sophistication to your arguments.
Grammatical Range
Work on improving the accuracy and complexity of your sentence structures. Pay attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and the use of conjunctions.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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