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cambridge 6 test 2 task 1 the table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

cambridge 6 test 2 task 1 the table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
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The table
illustrated
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illustrates
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 the data about
alteration
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the alteration
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 of travel in England from 1985 to 2000.
Overall
, all kinds of distance transport had
increase
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increased
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 except walking, bicycle and
local
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a local
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bus
 that had the lowest miles travelled. Looking at the details, there is a surge transited in
long distance
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long-distance
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bus
, train, taxi and others mode respectively.
For example
, long distance
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 pumped around 3 times from 1985 to 2000,
while
 travel
with
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by
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train
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trains
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 and other moves
had
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apply
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increased about 1.5 times
at
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in
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 15 years.
However
, it is interesting to note that
publics
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public
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 car
used
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use
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 was sharply high from 1985 and almost doubled
at
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in
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 2000. It is
cleared
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clear
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 that, travelers
went
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who went
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 to
other place
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another place
other places
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with
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by
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 walking was decreased slowly same as people who cycled,
while
 those who transported
with
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by
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 local
bus
, extremely fell around
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the quartered
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quartered
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quarter
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 of
century
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the century
a century
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. Walking per
persons
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person
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 and cyclist fluctuated between 18 and 10 miles travelled per year respectively and travelled by local
bus
 dumped around 1.5 times per publics.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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