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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

#english #school #languages #risk
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 a lot more urgency than a native local
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 is deemed as a global
language
.
Consequently
,
this
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local
language
speaker
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.
Although
 learning
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 is still quite important, it has many other mediums that can contribute to the
language
 introduction.
Hence
,
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 urgency for more attention towards the preservation of native
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 both school and everyday life and some potential efforts needed to preserve them.
Firstly
, access to
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language
-based media
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 massive as it is a global
language
. The wide variety of options
enable
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 those who want to learn
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by
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 easily
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 them and
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 exposed to the content
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. Concurrently, the opposite is happening in the case of
local
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 indigenous
language
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 is most likely
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more
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 limited number of media and native
speaker
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speakers
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 for anyone to learn.
This
 shows that
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 number of media gap needs to be filled to accommodate the local
language
 learning process.
In addition
, the view of
english
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 as a global
language
also
 contributes to the perception of how
english
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 is more useful as a
language
 compared to any local
language
 as it can help someone to find a job, especially in a foreign company. To combat similar perceptions, there is a need for the government to create a narrative about how the same companies will
also
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language
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 as the company will
also
 need to communicate with local stakeholders.
This
 notion
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 insight on how the perception can
also
 be changed using a narrated campaign to motivate everyone to preserve their local
language
 and the benefits that come with learning them.
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task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use stronger transition words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and precise words.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure and eliminate any grammatical errors.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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