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Band 5.5

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

In the past 50 years, there has been a dramatic increase in the use of
plastic
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 from a small to
bigger
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a bigger
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 scale. It has caused more harm to the environment over its
conveninence
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convenience
 of use and has contaminated the world to
an
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the
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extend
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extent
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 of endangering
animal
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animals
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 and hurting human life.
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, an instant action by the authorities can control the situation and promote the individual level
concern
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of concern
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. First of all, it is an undeniable fact that
plastic
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 has piled up in tons with no existing methods for decomposing it in an
environmental
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environmentally
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 healthy manner. Today,
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, the oceans are filled with
plastic
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 garbage
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which
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and
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which
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are
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is
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are
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 destroying
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apply
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the
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marine life,
such
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 as fish
are having
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have
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 heavy
plastic
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 materials in their bodies,
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and animals
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animals
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and animals
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getting
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get
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 their heads stuck in
plastic
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bags
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, suffocating and killing them.
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,
although
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 people try to remove the
plastic
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 from the face of
Earth
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the Earth
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 by burning
them
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it
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,
but
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due to
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 lack of knowledge
this
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 only
rises
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increases
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 the amount of harmful gases released and
also
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destroying
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destroys
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 the soil. In short,
plastic
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 has brought devastating global issues from sea life to wild animals, every inch of the atmosphere is affected by
plastic
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.
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, different environmentalists are stepping forward and promoting
the
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non-
plastic
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 things, in order to develop awareness among the masses. In recent years, people have shown more concern towards the deteriorating conditions which has directly impacted the wide use of
plastic
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bags
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. Recently, students have introduced shopping
bags
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 made from biodegradable material and are spreading the word globally. Here,
Government
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the Government
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 need to take some intimidating initiatives
such
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 as imposing a ban on things made from plastics,
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and
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opening a new market for cloth or
barn made
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barn-made
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bags
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 and different
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly material things. In conclusion, plastics are made using harsh chemicals and it takes more than a hundred years to decompose, destroying the natural habitat. With
this
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 increasing global warming it is high time to take action individually and by
authoroties
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authorities
 against the environmental destruction caused by
the
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plastic
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 trash and promote reusable materials.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea or topic. Use transition words and phrases to create a smooth flow between sentences and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary by using more precise and varied words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure to improve grammatical accuracy.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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