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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree / disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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A commonly held view is that teaching
children
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 to identify right and wrong at an early age does not need
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punishment
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 some believe it is necessary to apply a certain level of
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 to help them learn properly. I completely agree with
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 opinion because it helps
children
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 to understand the consequences of misbehaving.
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, the type of discipline they should receive depends on the situation. Mostly,
children
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 at a young age do not fully grasp the outcomes of their actions when they have tantrums, throw things or hit their friends. If we do not address
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 violent
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 properly, it can spiral out of control and even lead to serious consequences. Teaching
children
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 about the effects of their actions is essential, starting from a young age;
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, they may become more prone to violent
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. There are two types of punishments, positive and negative. Some positive
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 can be confronted with several benefits.
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, in school, teacher
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 entitled to give beneficial discipline to their students who
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 bad things
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 as being late for school or bullying, by giving mild
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 as doing some reflections to reflect what is right or wrong.
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, parents at home give a time-out system whenever the
children
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 do something wrong or bad and ask nicely the reasons why they did it. To summarise,
punishment
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 is necessary to properly teach
children
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 how to behave.
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, the
punishment
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 may apply
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 based on the situation.
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 at school, teachers give them mild
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 by having them do self-reflection on the aftermath,
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 at home, parents implement a time-out system.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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