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The diagram below represents a survey on whether consumers would actually consider buying cars from tech companies such as Apple & Google. Summarise the information given in the diagram. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below represents a survey on whether consumers would actually consider buying cars from tech companies such as Apple & Google. Summarise the information given in the diagram. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates if customers from India, China, Brazil, France, Germany,
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 States, and
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 of age groups from 18 years to 50 years and above would consider
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buying cars from tech companies
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 as Apple and Google.
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it is clear that
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 65% of the teenagers from the age group 18 to 34 in India are willing to switch their
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current
 car brand to a tech company.
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 above 65% of people from China and Brazil switch to Apple and Google.And 49% of customers from the age group 35 to 49 do change their cars but adults 50 years and above show less interest in changing their cars .
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 there is a significant decrease
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 market in countries like France, Germany ,
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 States and
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 Kingdom. Looking at the chart more closely
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 teenagers from India are more interested in changing car
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 to tech brands like Google and Apple
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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