Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the 20th century, the rich
is becoming
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richer and the poor
is becoming
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poorer.
This
gap
is becoming wider and every nation has a different approach to
deal
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dealing
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with poor
people
. What role should the governments of different countries play to help erase
this
gap
?
Further
, various reasons
of
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for
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world poverty, and how the needy can be helped
is
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are
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explained briefly in the subsequent paragraphs. Needy and poor citizens in a country reflect the poverty and failure of
legislature
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the legislature
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in certain aspects. The elected party is chosen by the citizens, and it is their responsibility to look after its
people
in hardships. Homeless and poor
people
are dealt
in
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with in
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different ways in every nation. Some counterparts of
the
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society believe they should be given respect
while
others oppose it. To lay down an example, Canada, a developed nation has done a lot for the
people
in need. From building shelters to providing meals and clothes to poor
people
in
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during
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COVID-19 , the government fulfilled the basic requirements at that time.
On the other hand
,
maximum
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a maximum
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number of deaths were reported in India during the pandemic,
due to
shortage
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a shortage
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of oxygen cylinders and the rich
people
were given
preferance
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preference
as poor
people
were able to afford the oxygen cylinders sold at high prices. Substantial reasons for world poverty begin when the public
sectors
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sector
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turn
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turns
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into privatisation. Wealth dominators of the countries are given various benefits by the legislature and
therefore
they become more rich. To illustrate, privatisation in India is at
peak
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its peak
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in
todays
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today's
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time. Railway sectors and factories which were once under the government are being privatised and given to
Ambani
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the Ambani
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and Adani
group
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groups
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. What's more
is
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, these groups have more power than the President in India.
In addition
,
taxes
are
layed
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laid
played
off in one or the other way for these groups but the farmers and other poor
people
are offered loans at a high rate of interest. Failure to pay the ROI lands them in deep trouble. What can be done to shorten the
gap
is
increase
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the
taxes
for rich
people
and lessen the
taxes
for needy citizens as they do not have enough funds to pay these
taxes
. More and more schemes and benefits should be given to these
people
and the basic needs can be fulfilled by the ruling party.
To conclude
,
the
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apply
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poor
people
have no respect in
todays
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today's
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time and the
gap
between rich and poor is widened with the involvement of governments. With some measures and imposition of high
taxes
on rich
people
, the tax money can be used to help
this
needy population and the
gap
can be shortened.
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