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Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the 20th century, the rich
is becoming
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 richer and the poor
is becoming
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became
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 poorer.
This
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gap
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 is becoming wider and every nation has a different approach to
deal
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dealing
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 with poor
people
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. What role should the governments of different countries play to help erase
this
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gap
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?
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, various reasons
of
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for
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 world poverty, and how the needy can be helped
is
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are
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 explained briefly in the subsequent paragraphs. Needy and poor citizens in a country reflect the poverty and failure of
legislature
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the legislature
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 in certain aspects. The elected party is chosen by the citizens, and it is their responsibility to look after its
people
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 in hardships. Homeless and poor
people
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 are dealt
in
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with in
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 different ways in every nation. Some counterparts of
the
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society believe they should be given respect
while
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 others oppose it. To lay down an example, Canada, a developed nation has done a lot for the
people
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 in need. From building shelters to providing meals and clothes to poor
people
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in
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during
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 COVID-19 , the government fulfilled the basic requirements at that time.
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,
maximum
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a maximum
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 number of deaths were reported in India during the pandemic,
due to
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shortage
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a shortage
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 of oxygen cylinders and the rich
people
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 were given
preferance
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preference
 as poor
people
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 were able to afford the oxygen cylinders sold at high prices. Substantial reasons for world poverty begin when the public
sectors
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sector
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turn
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turns
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 into privatisation. Wealth dominators of the countries are given various benefits by the legislature and
therefore
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 they become more rich. To illustrate, privatisation in India is at
peak
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its peak
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 in
todays
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today's
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 time. Railway sectors and factories which were once under the government are being privatised and given to
Ambani
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the Ambani
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 and Adani
group
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groups
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. What's more
is
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, these groups have more power than the President in India.
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,
taxes
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 are
layed
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laid
played
 off in one or the other way for these groups but the farmers and other poor
people
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 are offered loans at a high rate of interest. Failure to pay the ROI lands them in deep trouble. What can be done to shorten the
gap
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 is
increase
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to increase
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 the
taxes
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 for rich
people
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 and lessen the
taxes
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 for needy citizens as they do not have enough funds to pay these
taxes
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. More and more schemes and benefits should be given to these
people
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 and the basic needs can be fulfilled by the ruling party.
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,
the
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poor
people
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 have no respect in
todays
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today's
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 time and the
gap
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 between rich and poor is widened with the involvement of governments. With some measures and imposition of high
taxes
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 on rich
people
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, the tax money can be used to help
this
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 needy population and the
gap
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 can be shortened.
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