Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road saftey. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days the more cities make progress in the development process, the more the way citizens use vehicles becomes important.
Therefore
, it is argued by a group of people that the best
approach
for enhancing driving
standards
would be forcing all
drivers
to take regular road
courses
for
safety
reasons.
On the other hand
, some other individuals claim that only strict
punishments
are effective and would prevent
drivers
from driving in dangerous ways. In my opinion, a balanced
approach
would cover all issues here. To elaborate,
although
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cultural acts
such
as regular
safety
courses
are needed, strict
punishments
which cause reckless
drivers
costs would be a practical option that
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needed in some
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too. Generally,
both
groups of people that emphasize
punishments
and taking
safety
courses
for bad driving and improving driving
standards
, have good intentions. They probably know that many road accidents that cause increasing death rates are mostly because of bad driving behaviour.
However
, what
both
groups fail to consider is that improving driving
standards
require
both
cultural and practical act from the government. 
Due to
this
fact, governors should realize that making improvement in driving
standards
need changes in social policies. They should go after social scientists and get their opinion on what is the best way of enhancing driving
standards
.
Also
, they should consider
this
concept as an intersectional field which requires
both
sociological review and law-related regulation. As a matter of fact, the best way to decrease bad and dangerous driving is to use a balanced
approach
that covers all issues that are neglected by each of those arguments solely. In conclusion, despite the fact that regular
safety
courses
and strict
punishments
both
can be effective for reckless
drivers
they are not enough if they do not complete each other. As I mentioned above, making improvements in driving
standards
need an intersectional and balanced
approach
by governments to make
drivers
follow rules as a habit and
also
, by charging them in cases that are needed, prevent them from repeating bad driving.
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