Doctors, Nurses, and teachers make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree ?

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There is no doubt that every
professionals
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have
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their own contribution
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the improvement of society. There are people who think Doctors, Nurses and
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contribution to
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society is more than celebrities,
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, they should be paid more. I completely disagreed with
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I will explain my views.
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task response
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and provide a clear argument throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more effectively. Use linking words and logical transitions to improve the coherence and cohesion of your essay.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary by using more varied and precise words. Try to avoid repetition.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structures and improve your grammar. Use a variety of sentence types and structures.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribution
  • essential
  • well-being
  • education
  • training
  • dedication
  • entertain
  • inspire
  • significant
  • exorbitant
  • attract
  • talented
  • professions
  • improve
  • overall
  • quality
  • healthcare
  • priority
  • development
  • citizens
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