The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of children's charities which are located in
USA
funding sources and expenses percentage in Correct article usage
the USA
one
year period. In general, the Correct determiner usage
a
charity
receives the highest revenue
from donated food,
and uses almost all gains for program services. Remove the comma
apply
Additionally
, there occurs a surplus from the financial statement through the pie chart in children's charities.
To begin
with, donated food (86,6%) is the main source to fund the charity
. Therefore
, community contributions (10,4%) and program revenue
(2,2%) are the only revenue
which exceeds 1%. Meanwhile, other funding sources (investment income, government grants, and other income) merely generate less than 0,5% for the charity
. On the contrary
, the spent
only Replace the word
spending
include
3 main expenses.
Correct subject-verb agreement
includes
In addition
, most of the revenue
is for funding the program services (95,8%). While
,
fundraising and management and general expenses only spent 2,6% and 1,6% respectively. Remove the comma
apply
Furthermore
, there is a surplus phenomenon with more than 300.000 USD occurring in the children's charity
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