Some people think that history has nothing or little to tell us, but others believe that studying the past history can help us better understand the present.

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People

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have two ideas

a bout

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about

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the application of

history

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the first group believes that it refers to past

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and is not important, the second one believes they can learn some lessons that might be beneficial for us. In my

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we can be

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familiar

with our

life

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by researching

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history

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the history

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and understanding how our

anscestors

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ancestors

were living.

History

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inseparable

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part of our

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but some

people

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think it does not have anything new. They always emphasize that

history

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was

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repeated again and its

events

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are repeatable and

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studing

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studying

history

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wasting

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time.

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hand

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many

people

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this

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group believe that what happened in the past,

remain

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in the past and will not occur again.

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, the idea that

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changing the world during centuries the application of historical information is limited, is becoming widespread.

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, many individuals believe that

history

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is a value that should be learned and

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that our

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present or even prospective

life

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is related to the

life

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of ancient

people

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, researching

history

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can benefit our

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life

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lives

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, by

studing

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studying

past

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in our local area we can understand the social behaviours of our ancestors and by selecting the positive habits and

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applying

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our daily

routins

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routines

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, improve our society.

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politictions

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politicians

and governments should learn how to interact with

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, how to enhance

people

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’s

life

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, and how to treat

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allies and enemies of the country.

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, these are the matter of experience and these can

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only by studying historical

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, kingdoms, and wars. Eventually, by knowing what happened to the previous

people

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, we can find our role and situation in

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history

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subsequently

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we can estimate our future and prepare ourselves for the near future. The

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that either

history

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is important to study or not,

devide

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divide

individuals into two groups and in my point of view

studing

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studying

history

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has a significant effect on our awareness.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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323 words

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Some people think that history has nothing or little to tell us, but others believe that studying the past history can help us better understand the present.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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