Some people think that history has nothing or little to tell us, but others believe that studying the past history can help us better understand the present.

People
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the application of
history
.
While
the first group believes that it refers to past
events
and is not important, the second one believes they can learn some lessons that might be beneficial for us. In my
opinion
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we can be
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familiar
with our
life
by researching
history
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the history
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and understanding how our
anscestors
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ancestors
were living.
History
is
inseparable
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an inseparable
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part of our
life
but some
people
think it does not have anything new. They always emphasize that
history
was
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is
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repeated again and its
events
are repeatable and
by
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studing
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studying
a
history
is
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time.
On the other
hand
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many
people
in
this
group believe that what happened in the past,
remain
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in the past and will not occur again.
Additionally
, the idea that
due to
changing the world during centuries the application of historical information is limited, is becoming widespread.
Conversely
, many individuals believe that
history
is a value that should be learned and
our
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that our
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present or even prospective
life
is related to the
life
of ancient
people
.
Therefore
, researching
history
can benefit our
life
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lives
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.
Firstly
, by
studing
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studying
past
events
in our local area we can understand the social behaviours of our ancestors and by selecting the positive habits and
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applying
them
in
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to
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our daily
routins
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routines
routine
, improve our society.
Secondly
,
politictions
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politicians
and governments should learn how to interact with
people
, how to enhance
people
’s
life
, and how to treat
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allies and enemies of the country.
Thus
, these are the matter of experience and these can
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only by studying historical
events
, kingdoms, and wars. Eventually, by knowing what happened to the previous
people
, we can find our role and situation in
the
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history
subsequently
we can estimate our future and prepare ourselves for the near future. The
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that either
history
is important to study or not,
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divide
individuals into two groups and in my point of view
studing
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studying
history
has a significant effect on our awareness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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