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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants
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The bar chart illustrates how many males and females took part in four evening
courses
 at an adult education centre in 2009. The pie chart demonstrates the percentage ages of
people
 who joined in these classes.
Overall
, in most
courses
, women tended to enrol more than
men
, with the figures for the largest seeing in language class.
While
 the sculpture course attracted more
men
 than women.
In addition
, seniors of the 50 or plus
age
 group attended evening
courses
 the most. The dramatic difference was seen in the numbers of women and
men
 who took part in evening language classes in 2009, which was 40 and 20
people
 in that order.
Similarly
, the number of females who joined the drama course was far higher than that of
men
, with the respective figures being 20 and 10
people
.
Conversely
, the sculpture class appealed to a lot of
men
, with 10
people
, compared to 5 female counterparts. The percentage of evening course participants in the 50 or over
age
 group was 42%, followed by students in the 40-49
age
 group at 26%. The figures for the 30-39 and 20-29
age
 groups were lower, at 16% and 11% respectively. The least proportion of
people
 who attended evening
courses
 was aged under 20, which had 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, people, men, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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