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Nowadays , a lot of people enjoy watching sports on Tv . Do you think the advantages of watching sports on Tv outweigh the disadvantage?

#people #sports #tv
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At present, more
people
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 are enjoying
to see
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watching
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 games on
television
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.Many
people
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did
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do
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 not get
full
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the full
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 experience if they
watches
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watch
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 sport on
Tv
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,
therefore
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 I believe that
,
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apply
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of viewing
sports
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 on
television
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outnumbered
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outnumber
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 the drawback.
Firstly
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, nowadays more and more
people
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 are enjoying
to watch
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watching
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sports
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 on
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Tv
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TV
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due to
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 the fact that
people
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feels
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feel
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 happy when watching their favorite players in slo-motion on
television
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.It is so admirable if a player does a skill and will be replayed in
slo-motion
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slow-motion
,
people
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enjoys
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enjoy
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 that because sometimes it can be replayed two to three times
depends
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depending
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 on how
more
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apply
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skillful
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skilful
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 it is.
For example
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 Messi, he is a
too
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very
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 fast player in soccer, so most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 cannot be satisfied if they
viewing
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view
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 once without playing again because sometimes the bling of an eye
your
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you
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lost
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lose
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 all of it.
Secondly
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, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 are amazing when they
are stares
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stare
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 at
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the Tv
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Tv
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TV
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on
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during
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sports
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 time.There are limitations
of
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to
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complains
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complaints
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 especially when
people
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watching
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watch
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 different games from their homesteads, they do what they want.
For instance
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,
as for
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apply
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me, I feel happy when
if
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apply
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I sit in my underwear looking at Premier League matches and I can
also
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 eat snacks and
drinking
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drink
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 for
a cheaper prices
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a cheaper price
cheaper prices
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.
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, many
people
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 do not get full experience when viewing
sports
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 or games on
television
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.
People
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 will get used to many things when they are watching
sports
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 live
for example
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 in a stadium, experience
to
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apply
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socialisation and meeting with the players in person.More
people
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 enjoy when they
meets
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meet
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best
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the best
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 players in the world
on
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at
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 World Cup matches and others
they
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apply
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pay
a
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apply
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such
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amount
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an amount
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 to CR7 for him to write a signature on jerseys.Viewing from the playgrounds,
people
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also
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 learn
even
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apply
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to wait for a period of time to pee since they are long
que
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queue
queues
 for the bathroom in stadiums.
To conclude
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, more and more
people
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enjoys
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enjoy
show examples
slo-motion
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slow-motion
 and replays when watching
sports
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 on
Tv
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,
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however
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however,
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 they did not get some other experiences and I
believed
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believe
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 that
,
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apply
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benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh the drawback.
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