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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph displays the
stock
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 values of four different high-tech corporations from 2011 to 2016.
Overall
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, Facebook’s value steadily increased,
while
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 Yahoo’s decreased. Apple’s
stock
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 price fluctuated wildly throughout the
period
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 and Google’s stayed relatively unchanged. Facebook started the
period
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 with a
stock
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 market valuation of approximately 7,500 and
this
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 consistently moved up in value
year
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 on
year
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 to reach a peak of around 20,000 in 2016. Yahoo began the recorded
period
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 with a very similar value to Facebook, but
in contrast
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, its
stock
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 devalued every
year
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, until it reached a low of about 2,500 in 2016. Apple
stock
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 was valued at just below 5,000 in 2011 and
this
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 jumped dramatically to nearly 35,000 the following
year
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, before plummeting to around 7,000 in 2013. It recovered slightly in 2014 to around 12,000 and
subsequently
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 fell to a price of just over 5,000 in 2016. Google’s shares remained at around 1,000 for the entire
period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, period, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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