Today, many do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problem does this cause? What can be done about this?

The situation of not knowing about neighbours of citizens in large urban areas is said to be worsening. The root cause for
this
is the lack of connections between them, yet it can be solved by governments raising funds to organize some trips to foster their bond. The principal cause of the problem
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they do not have much time to spend chatting in their neighbourhood. It must be recognized that the working schedule of some workers in big cities is totally busy.
As a consequence
, they will have a very hard day and have less date to rest themselves so it is really inconvenient for them to meet their neighbors. Take Arizona, the United States as an example, the normal day in
this
metropolitan area is very busy and
that is
the reason why Arizona has the lowest percentage of people know another in their society.
However
, there are sensible measures to tackle the problem. I strongly believe that the authorities should raise money and provide some kind of vacation to their native. I think that after a time when the government apply
this
solution, they will see strong bonds between the natives
as a result
. It is true in Helsinki, Poland, the happiest city in the world.
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, they usually spend
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chatting and relaxing with their neighbours at the weekend so it is not hard to understand why Helsinki’s residents have the highest happiness rate in the world. In conclusion,
although
most communities want to live their private lives in
this
modern century, not being able to identify your housemates and communicate well with them is causing more harm than good. the public should find ways to have a good bond with their neighbours irrespective of the nature of their work.

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