The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram illustrates the way in which
fish
is smoked.
Overall
,the are 13 stages in the process,beginning with catching
fish
from the sea by using fishing nets and culminating in selling in the market.
To begin
, the
fish
is caught from the sea by using a fishing net. In the next stage, the caught
fish
is taken to a port by using a boat. In the next stage, the caught
fish
is put inside freezer boxes to stay fresh.
Following
this
, the
fish
is thawed in fresh water. After that, the
fish
is cut open and cleaned.
Then
, the
fish
is placed in the container with salt water and yellow colouring. After that, the
fish
is smoked. Later, the
fish
is put in boxes to make them look clean.
Then
, the
fish
is frozen again under 0 C. Once
this
stage is completed,the
fish
is put in a cold store.
Finally
, the cold store boxes are distributed to
fish
shops by using a truck.
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