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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS INFIRMATION ABOUT CHANGES IN AVERAGE HOUSE PRICES IN FIVE DIFFERENT CITIES BETWEEN 1990 AND 2002 COMPARED WITH THE AVERAGE PRICES IN 1989

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS INFIRMATION ABOUT CHANGES IN AVERAGE HOUSE PRICES IN FIVE DIFFERENT CITIES BETWEEN 1990 AND 2002 COMPARED WITH THE AVERAGE PRICES IN 1989
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The graph
illustrate
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about
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how the
cost
 of
accomodation
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accommodation
 changes
among
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in
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 five cities from 1990 to 2002 compared with the
cost
 in 1989.
Overall
, the only country
which
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in which
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 the
accomodation
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accommodation
price
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prices
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 declined was Frankfrut
while
other
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the other
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 four countries seem to have
increasing
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increased
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cost
 of the houses in almost one and a half
decade
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decades
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.
Furthermore
, London shows
the
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dramatically
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change
for
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in
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the
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price. The
change
of
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in
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accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
cost
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costs
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 in
Frankfrut
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Frankfurt
 shows the
decline
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declining
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 trend that
explained
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is explained
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 during the half of 1995, the rate reached approximately 3%
while
in
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from
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 1996 to 2000 it decreased
around
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from around
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 1%.
However
,
this
 was different from other countries
such
 as New
york
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York
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 with
10
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a 10
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% rate of positive
change
, Madrid got approximately 1% more
changed
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change
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, Tokyo rose to 2.5%
of
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change
 and London had the highest
different
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difference
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cost
 of houses which increased between 1990 to 1995 with 1996 to 2002. As the highest
change
 rate of the house,
in
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from
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 1996 to 2002 London
reach
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reached
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 almost 12% which shows 15%
percent
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per cent
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 of changes compared to
Frankfrut
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Frankfurt
 as the lowest in the period of time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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