Successful professional athletes can earn much more than people in other important professions, such as nurses, doctors and teacher.Someone considers it quite justified, and someone considers it unfair.To what extent tdo you agree or disagree?

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acceptable norm that some employees in some fields earn more.

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who will offer you to work remotely. Meanwhile, receiving a higher salary can be seen as a reward for hard work, and

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better pay for a job well done is worthwhile and is acceptable

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, in my opinion, I agree that some professional athletes should receive more pay than others.

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Successful professional athletes can earn much more than people in other important professions, such as nurses, doctors and teacher.Someone considers it quite justified, and someone considers it unfair.To what extent tdo you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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