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You are in a hospital with a broken leg. Your colleagues have sent you get well soon greeting cards and gifts. Write a letter to them and include: Thank them for everything Explain how you spend time in the hospital Inform them about your recovery process

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Dear Companions, I hope all of you are doing well by the
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 of the Almighty. I am carrying out fine as well. I do not have any words to explain how grateful I am to
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 you all in my life. Thank you for all the lovely messages and gifts.
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, you all know, I am living a difficult life right now and waiting badly to go home. I have become bored not only having the same food
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 but
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 surrounded by the walls of the hospital.
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 my relatives come
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 to see me,
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I am still missing my corporate life.
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, it is a matter of ray that I am getting better gradually.
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, I am getting back sense
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 my leg and now I can move my leg without hurting myself.
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, my doctor said, I can go home
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next Monday.
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the office from 1st December. I can't wait to see and hug you all. Please keep praying for my recovery. Thanks again for everything you guys have done for me. Warm regards, Lisa
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains only one main idea and supporting details.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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