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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirement #laws
Recycling has always been an important issue for environmentalists, and it is always said that
this
 action has so many advantages for
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nature. Having said that,
still
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 so many
people
 underestimate the necessity of it, owing to
this
, some individuals believe that the only way to increase recycling is
legislation
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. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 point of view and how much it is needed.
To begin
 with, at
first,
it may look undesirable to link
environment
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 with
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, but sometimes we have no other choice. When citizens have not been persuaded to do as they were told, I assume putting some extra pressure can be appropriate. It is proven that
people
 perform in a more disciplined way when there is force upon them, and maybe it appears slightly hard or time-consuming, but after a
while
, it becomes like a manner, and it will sink
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 their culture. We have been through some analogous situations too.
For instance
, in my own homeland, fastening car
belt
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 was like a burden, and
people
 felt no need to use them.
Although
government
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 and media put so much effort
to change
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 their minds, the results were not promising.
As a consequence
, they made
this
 a rule
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 and charged
people
 in case of neglecting it. After a couple of years,
this
 phenomenon stuck to the
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 life of the
people
, and everyone started doing it naturally.
On the other hand
, we should not lay on
authorities
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, we should do some cultural activities too.
For example
, municipal workers can situate some
especial
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 places for recycled and separated waste.
Furthermore
, they can design some posters or banners to encourage the crowd and influence them. All in all, making recycling a legal requirement is a logical decision
,
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 and can result in so many beneficial outcomes.
Also
, we can add other factors and activities to boost
this
 action, and
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 we will all have a greener earth and healthier life in the future.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction that directly addresses the prompt. Additionally, include a concluding statement to summarize the main points.
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Provide more relevant examples and evidence to support the main points.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and specific language to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and use a variety of sentence types to demonstrate your grammatical range.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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