The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.
The line graph illustrates the changing trends in the
numbers
of students, in
1000s
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, who visited Australia for education from four different
countries
between 1982 and 2000.
Overall
it is evident that visitor
numbers
from all four
countries
increased over the time period. At the start of the period,
while
Malaysia had around 5,000 students per year visiting Australia, the other
countries
had none.
However
, though remaining at the highest number up until 1990 and increasing
after
this
, visitors number from Malaysia finished at the lowest levels of all the
countries
, at around 18,000. The lack of student visitors continued
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Hong Kong and Singapore up until 1987. At that point arrivals from Singapore gradually increased over the years, culminating in nearly 20,000 visitors per year in 2000,
while
arrivals from Hong Kong showed a more erratic pattern, fluctuating after 1996 and finishing at 19,000 per year.
However
, the biggest change was seen in
numbers
coming from Indonesia. Though
this
started low, arrivals kept increasing over the years.
Numbers
peaked in 1998 at approximately 28,000, before dropping to final arrival
numbers
of 23,000, which exceeded all the other
countries
.
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