The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.
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The line graph illustrates the changing trends in the
numbers
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of students, in
1000s
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, who visited Australia for education from four different
countries
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between 1982 and 2000.
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it is evident that visitor
numbers
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from all four
countries
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increased over the time period. At the start of the period,
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Malaysia had around 5,000 students per year visiting Australia, the other
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had none.
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, though remaining at the highest number up until 1990 and increasing
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this
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, visitors number from Malaysia finished at the lowest levels of all the
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, at around 18,000. The lack of student visitors continued
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Hong Kong and Singapore up until 1987. At that point arrivals from Singapore gradually increased over the years, culminating in nearly 20,000 visitors per year in 2000,
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arrivals from Hong Kong showed a more erratic pattern, fluctuating after 1996 and finishing at 19,000 per year.
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, the biggest change was seen in
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coming from Indonesia. Though
this
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started low, arrivals kept increasing over the years.
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peaked in 1998 at approximately 28,000, before dropping to final arrival
numbers
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of 23,000, which exceeded all the other
countries
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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