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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Introduction
To survive
in
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a
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abroad,
native
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a native
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language
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is
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really
make
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creates
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 social and practical problems
while
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native speakers.I agree with the statement that it is very difficult to maintain social and practical
problem
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problems
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 in
abroad
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a abroad
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 country
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 speaking a foreign
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.
Body · 1
It is difficult because
people
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 are not cooperative
to
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the
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people
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 who are from
other country
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another country
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.
Every where
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 they speak own
language
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while
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 interacting with others.
For instance
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, in
germany
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Germany
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people
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 are promoting
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their own
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language
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 rather than
other
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another language
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language
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. So it
create
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lot
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a lot
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 of
problem
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problems
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 like shopping and other activities.Those who want to do part-time jobs
also
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become
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find it
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 difficult to deal with native
people
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Body · 2
Secondly
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, foreign
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language
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 are difficult to understand. It
take
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 time to learn
other
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another language
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language
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that
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which
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create
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 problems. If we stay
long
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 time
then
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 only we can learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. If we want to find
full time
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full-time
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 jobs
there
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they
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also
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 require
native
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the native
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language
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that
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of that
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 country so getting
an
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 job
it
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is difficult.
Conclusion
To
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 conclusion , there are many problems we will face like social and practical
problem
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problems
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while
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 going abroad if we are not comfortable with the native
language
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This
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 because
people
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 are non-cooperative and
also
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learning
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learn
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native
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the native
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language
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 of
the
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apply
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foreign countries.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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