The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
The line graph compares the trades of three various
books
by
dollars
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over a period of four years in a specific country. It is noticeable that the
children’s
books
were in the highest demand over the period shown,
while
the educational
books
were less wanted by readers. As per the graph, in 2002, adult fiction was the most purchased kind, with approximately $45
million
. Following that,
children’s
books
took second place with sales of over $30
million
,
whereas
educational
books
had a moderate fluctuation, at between around $25
million
and $32
million
. But just one year later, when adult fiction lost its popularity, the sales of
children’s
books
overtook it by achieving over $40
million
. In 2006, the purchase of
children’s
books
reached a peak of nearly $55
million
.
By contrast
, adult fiction’s sales figures saw a dramatic decline to $30
million
, and in the meantime, they were
also
left behind by educational
books
, which were sold for over $30
million
.
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