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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The line graph compares the trades of three various
books
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 by
dollars
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 over a period of four years in a specific country. It is noticeable that the
children’s
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books
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 were in the highest demand over the period shown,
while
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 the educational
books
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 were less wanted by readers. As per the graph, in 2002, adult fiction was the most purchased kind, with approximately $45
million
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. Following that,
children’s
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books
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 took second place with sales of over $30
million
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,
whereas
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 educational
books
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 had a moderate fluctuation, at between around $25
million
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 and $32
million
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. But just one year later, when adult fiction lost its popularity, the sales of
children’s
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books
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 overtook it by achieving over $40
million
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. In 2006, the purchase of
children’s
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books
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 reached a peak of nearly $55
million
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.
By contrast
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, adult fiction’s sales figures saw a dramatic decline to $30
million
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, and in the meantime, they were
also
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 left behind by educational
books
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, which were sold for over $30
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, children’s, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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