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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

All cars that burns fossil fuels should be banned and electric car should replace them. Do you agree or disagree

#cars #burns #fuels #car
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In the modern
world
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, the energy car is increasing
due to
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 many
people
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think
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 that these
cars
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 are good for the
environment
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. I agree that energy
cars
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 should replace normal
cars
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.
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 essay will discuss why many
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 need to
use
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 energy
cars
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 from my point of view and will give reasons from my experiences.
To begin
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 with, the benefit of electric
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.
Firstly
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, electric
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 are good for the
environment
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 because these
cars
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use
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 natural
power
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such
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 as the
power
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 from the sun, and the
power
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 of electricity.
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, the survey found that 80 per cent
per cent
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of developed countries like Finland and the Netherlands are using electric
cars
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, and the result showed that the environments in their countries are better.
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, I believe that driving electric
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 is valuable and
this
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 action will take care of the
environment
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 around the
world
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 many researchers say that fossils may be harmful to our
world
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.
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, many
people
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 think that
power
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cars
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 and battery chargers are expensive,
however
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, I think that the cost will decline because I think that if many
people
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use
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power
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cars
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, electric
cars
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 and charger costs will decline, and I believe
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 not more than ten years, many
people
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 will
use
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 it.
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, I would like to recommend the new generation of
people
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 to drive it because
this
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 is the best way to save our
world
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.
To sum up
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, I totally agree that electric
cars
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 should replace
cars
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 that burn fossil because the electric car takes care of our
environment
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.
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task response
Make sure to clearly address all parts of the prompt and provide a well-rounded discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Create a clear and organized structure by using appropriate transition words and logical sequencing of ideas.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of words and phrases to express ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation to enhance the overall clarity and coherence of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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