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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
#population #india #china #year #projections #growth
The line graph displays
the
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India and
China
's
population
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populations
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 for fifty years,
start
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starting
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 from the
year
 2000 to the present day with
approximation
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an approximation
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 for growth to the
year
 2050. The data are given by
billions
. In general,
projection
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projections
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 of population growth both in India and
China
 are gradually
rise up
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rising
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. The two ended up with an accretion of more than 1.5
billions
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billion
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 citizens in fifty years of estimation.
The
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India
was start
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started
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 at 1.0
billions
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billion
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 residents
,
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 and
have
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has
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 slightly
increase
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year
 by
year
 for half
century
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a century
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untill
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until
 the number of
expand
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expanded
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reach
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reached
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 1.6
billions
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billion
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people
.
Furthermore
, the augmentation
have
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 been increasing
0.6
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by 0.6
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billions
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billion
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people
.
The
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China
was start
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started
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 at 1.25 billion
people
, and
have
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has
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really
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a really
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 small expansion estimation
to
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of
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 1.4
billions
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billion
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for
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over
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 five decades.
Moreover
, the enlargement only
rise
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rises
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 up
for
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to
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 1.5 billion
people
.
According to
 the data,
China
would
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will
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 have
been reaching
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reached
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 more than 1.4 billion
people
 between 2020 and 2030, but unfortunately, the calculation of population growth will have dropped for
next
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the next
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 three decades
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, year, billions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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