The charts show the average levels of participation and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore. Write at least 150 words!

The charts show the average levels of participation and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore. Write at least 150 words!
The bar graph illustrates
an
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the
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average number of
years
spent at school between
adult
males and
females
in Singapore from 2000 to 2010,
while
the pie chart provides
an information
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information
a piece of information
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about the highest
education
level
of adults over the period given.
Overall
,
adult
males
was
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were
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higher than
females
in average levels of participation in
education
, and the highest
percentage
education
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of education
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level
was in
highschool
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high school
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qualification
in 2000 and
master
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master's
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qualification
in 2010. With regards to the bar graph, in 2000,
an
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average number of
adult
males was higher than
adult
females
approximately 9
years
. There was a slight increase in 2010 at about 11.5
years
.
Moreover
, the average number of
adult
females
was 8
years
in 2000 and 2002.
Additionally
, it was slightly increased in 2010 at 8.5% Regarding the pie chart, in 2000, the highest
percentage
in
education
level
was in
highschool
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high school
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qualification
at 32.13%,
whereas
the secondary school
qualification
was at 26.3%.
In contrast
,
master
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master's
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qualification
and university
qualification
were in the lowest
percentage
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percentages
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at just 7.5 and 8.3% respectively.
However
, there
is
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was
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a significant change in the highest
education
level
of adults in 2010. The highest
percentage
was in the university
qualification
at 32.93%, and the master
qualification
was slightly different at 30.31%. The lowest
percentage
was in primary
qualification
at just 2.1%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, adult, females, education, level, percentage, qualification with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.

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