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Country and Overseas have sharply increased over the years from 37 jumps to 60 in UK minutes in 2002.

The bar chart illustrates the total of
minutes
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 spent on telephone communication in the UK in three categories namely local – fixed line, domestic and international – fixed line, and mobile (calls ) from 1995 to 2002. There was a dynamic expansion and decrease in the volume of local-fixed lines, which in 1995 from 70 to 89
minutes
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 it grew particularly high, peaking in 1999
with
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at
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 90
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 and gradually decreasing after 1999-2002.
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, both Domestic and international-fixed lines
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 mobile (all calls) consist of enhanced all of the year. Country and Overseas have sharply increased over the years from 37 jumps to 60 in the UK
minutes
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 in 2002. Same conditions with the digital sector which have seen a strong increase from 3 to 44 in
minutes
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 calling in the UK between 1995 and 2002.
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, the local communication type still led the market for a whole year. The next option is talking by
fixed-line
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fixed line
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 in
nation
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the nation
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 and overseas, and
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last
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the last
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 is
digital
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a digital
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 phone.

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