You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter, mention: •Where have you moved? •What problem are you facing regarding the bank’s communication? • What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address.

Dear Harry, I am writing a letter to give you a new
address
to post my documents here. I was working at the Limelight brand in
the
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Lahore
city
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and my manager
is
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transferred me
in
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the
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Sahiwal. When I moved here I was stuck
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my work and I had
not
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time to change my
address
.
However
, when I needed my current bank statement
then
I realised that my all documents were
sending
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on
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my previous
address
.
Although
, I do
facing
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communication problems many times that
your
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are not respond through
helpline
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. Whenever
,
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I call your agent
then
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the line is busy and I
could not
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change my new
address
.
Furthermore
, your website is
also
working poorly so that I can not register my
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. If you don't believe me you could check your website on your own. I request you to please solve
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matter
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communicate with you easily.
Moreover
, I would
also
like to share my new
address
so that you
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change
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pervious
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House number. After
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I can receive my documents
in
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this
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given below
address
. House No. 47 Tariq Raod Lane 25, Peshawar. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely,
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task achievement
Make sure to fully address all the points mentioned in the prompt. You have not clearly mentioned where you have moved to in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas in a logical structure. The letter lacks clarity and coherence.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to make your writing more varied and expressive.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. There are several errors throughout the letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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