You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter, mention: •Where have you moved? •What problem are you facing regarding the bank’s communication? • What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address.
Dear Harry,
I am writing a letter to give you a new
address
to post my documents here.
I was working at the Limelight brand in the
Lahore Correct article usage
apply
city
and my manager Capitalize word
City
is
transferred me Unnecessary verb
apply
in
Change preposition
to
the
Sahiwal. When I moved here I was stuck Correct article usage
apply
in
my work and I had Change preposition
at
not
time to change my Correct your spelling
no
address
. However
, when I needed my current bank statement then
I realised that my all documents were sending
Change the form of the verb
sent
on
my previous Change preposition
to
address
.
Although
, I do facing
communication problems many times that Wrong verb form
face
your
are not respond through Change the pronoun
you
helpline
. WheneverAdd an article
the helpline
a helpline
,
I call your agent Remove the comma
apply
then
the line is busy and I Rephrase
apply
could not
change my new Wrong verb form
cannot
address
. Furthermore
, your website is also
working poorly so that I can not register my complain
. If you don't believe me you could check your website on your own.
I request you to please solve Replace the word
complaint
this
matter to
communicate with you easily. Change preposition
so
Moreover
, I would also
like to share my new address
so that you could
change Wrong verb form
can
from
Correct pronoun usage
it from
Correct article usage
the pervious
pervious
House number. After Correct your spelling
previous
that
I can receive my documents Add a comma
that,
in
Change preposition
at
this
given below Correct determiner usage
the
address
.
House No. 47 Tariq Raod Lane 25, Peshawar.
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours Sincerely,Submitted by mobinadurrani43 on
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task achievement
Make sure to fully address all the points mentioned in the prompt. You have not clearly mentioned where you have moved to in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas in a logical structure. The letter lacks clarity and coherence.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to make your writing more varied and expressive.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. There are several errors throughout the letter.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.