Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the exitnction of species and loss of biodiversity What are the causes of loss of biodiversity ? What solutions can you suggest ?
Nowadays, a lot of
animals
do not exist and many different species have become rare to find. Human beings destroy habitats and cause a loss of biodiversity Use synonyms
due to
the world's development. Linking Words
This
essay will discuss all of the factors and will draw my personal solution.
There is no doubt that there are lots of causes that remove Linking Words
wild-life
Correct your spelling
wildlife
such
as killing Linking Words
animals
for fun or Use synonyms
to make
an investment for clothes or food Change the verb form
making
Linking Words
also
making new cities or building toxic companies. Rephrase
apply
For example
, oil and gas companies are the most harmful things Linking Words
for
Change preposition
to
the
plants and Correct article usage
apply
animals
Use synonyms
due to
the fact that they have to build them in remote areas which is mostly Linking Words
on
desert and forest which lead to a negative impact on living organisms. Change preposition
in
However
, oil and gas rigs are crucial for the development.
In conclusion, after a careful analysis of all the reasons we could say that the solution is the replacement. Linking Words
In other words
, these habits can be replaced with an eco-friendly way Linking Words
such
as solar batteries and Linking Words
non-
Correct word choice
non-animal
animals
products. Use synonyms
For instance
, we can use electric cars Linking Words
instead
of gasoline cars and we can use fake leather rather than animal leather Linking Words
also
we must know that Linking Words
animals
have the right to live too.Use synonyms
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task response
The essay lacks in-depth analysis and does not fully address the causes and solutions related to the loss of biodiversity. The examples provided are vague and lack specific details.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The logical structure of the essay is weak, and the points are not well-organized.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited, and the use of vocabulary is not appropriate for an academic essay. There are errors in word choice and expression of ideas.
grammatical range
The essay lacks grammatical accuracy and contains multiple errors in sentence structure, verb agreement, and preposition use. Punctuation and sentence formation need improvement.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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