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that is a action on month. what do you do in the retreat day?

#action #month #retreat
you know what to do in retreat day? I will share for everyone understand than. The fisrt, we limit max volume when talk. Even we are not talking in have lunch. And we don't used smart phone in tim retreat. at now, i will present detail: We attended the Mass the first day At 8 a.m. We will go to the Chaple listening Priest preach. The toppic can: prayer in your life, or how do you do to union in god? or preach for philosophi of life. We will listenning a passage of Bible and Priest will explain for the meaning and apply your life. after about one hour, we need go to confession to clean my soul. I like
this
 action. because the same become new person in the faith, it for blessing of god, it opprtunity to chang myselfs. after that, we have time private to pray alone with god and read spirit book or can reflection for lesson befor. In the after noon, we have tow hour share thinks by the question be suggest.
that is
 action for a retreat day! thankyou for listenning!
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