The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates information about
money
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which was spent on different types of products during 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
UK
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had more spending
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goods than
France
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, except for computers and perfume.
Additionally
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, the dominant
amount
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of
money
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spent was on cars for both nations. Looking at the figures in
further
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detail, it is obvious that the
UK
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's spending outnumbered
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France
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counterparts at £450 thousand against exactly £400000 in that order. As for the
amount
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of
money
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spent on camera, there was £350000 in the
UK
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,
while
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France
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accounted for £150000, making it the biggest disparity. Turning towards the remaining kinds of goods where its figure saw smaller differences. With respect to books, the
amount
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of
money
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spent by the
UK
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was higher than that of
France
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at £400000 and £300000, respectively.Regarding perfume, there was a dissimilar trend
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which stood at £400000 for the
UK
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and £300000 for
France
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.
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, both
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and the
UK
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also
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made up a similar
amount
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of
money
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on computers, at around £350000 .
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, uk, france, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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