Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The contemporary world is extremely dynamic.
Therefore
,
people
have to experience some favourable or unfavourable situations during their
lives
. A segment of
community
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the community
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trusts that it is good to accept bad situations
such
as an
unpleasent
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unpleasant
occupation or lack of money.
However
,
other
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the other
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part
is try
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is trying
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to enhance those
type
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types
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of bad
circumstance
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circumstances
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.
This
essay
would
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will
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discuss both
aspect
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aspects
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of
this
statement and
providing
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provide
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evidence
to
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as to
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why
people
should improve
this
particular situation
from
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in
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their
lives
. I believe that individuals should improve
those bad situation
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that bad situation
those bad situations
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from
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in
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their
lives
. On the one hand, unexpectedly
people
have to accept some
unsatisfacory
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unsatisfactory
conditions.
For instance
, in the modern world, there
are
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is
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enormus
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enormous
competition can be observed for
the
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apply
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jobs.
Hence
,
jon
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job
Jon
seekers have to accept offers if they
are not satisfy
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are not satisfied
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with the employer.
Further
,
ubsatisfied
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unsatisfied
jobs may
also
lead
getting
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to getting
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down the strong financial backbone.
Due to
this
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these
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conditions
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conditions,
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people
direct
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to a number of problems. In the latest research has been found
75
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that 75
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% of
new
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apply
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commers to the job market
who
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apply
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are suffering
dissatisfaction
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from dissatisfaction
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of
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with
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their occupation and scarcity of money.
On the other hand
,
people
should not be stuck
to
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in
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their
confortable
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comfortable
zone. Because the comfortable zone
directed
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is directed
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to create vast
problamatic
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problematic
situations. The
world
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world's
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leading businessmen always tried and overcome the above
sais
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said
problems
by
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with
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the
inprovements
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improvements
.
For example
,
build
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building
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up a confident and professional career background is essential to find a successful occupation.
Additionally
, money
invesment
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investment
plans frequently drive to reduce financial problems and build up
strong
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a strong
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personality.
To conclude
, current society continuously looking for
enhamcement
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improvement
of
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in
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their living condition,
while
planning development.
Accordingly
, considering the above-mentioned facts, modern society
explore
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explores
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the
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apply
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various improvements for
better
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a better
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lifestyle. Owing to that my purview is,
people
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that people
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should follow the improvement to overcome
the
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apply
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bad circumstances
through out
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throughout
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the
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their
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lives
.
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